A society develops the technology in communicating devices rapidly such as smart phones, tablets and other communicating devices. Some people claims that the disadvantages of such device outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As society develops, the way of communication has developed. Due to this new way of communication, people's standard of living has improved. However, the psychological and physical damages are inevitable. Therefore, the communicating devices can cause more harm than benefits, so that an appropriate using manner is required.
In the past, the way of interaction and communication was limited without modern communicating devices. Since the common way of communicate each other was via mail or telephone. Furthermore, the insufficient communication method has limited the time and location of conversation. In other words, people could not have a conversation when people from abroad or travel around. Therefore, the communication was requiring a longer than those of these days.
Nowadays, people can communicate each other easily, so that the geographical differences are not a barrier. People can easily communicate each other at their convenient time. Therefore, people can socialise easily and even they can make global friends.
Not only individuals would be beneficial from such development. The companies are getting the most advantages from telecommunication devices. Recently, the corporations are broadly distributed as the society becomes globalised. Due to this globalisation, companies require to communicate with oversea department. The use of communicating devices can help them to achieve the tasks faster and easy to communicate between departments. Therefore, the development of communicating devices have enabled the interaction of people easily.
However, despite all these advantages, it cannot avoid the disadvantages. There are several disadvantages of such use. The most obvious one would be the physical damages such as bad eye sight, backache and fatigue. Furthermore, the longer they are using modern technologies, the more they are affected psychologically. This can lead to various mental diseases such as addiction, depression and isolation and which affect physical socialisation with others.
In conclusion, it is common to see that the development of technology has enabled the improvement of people's lifestyles. This communicating device development helps people to achieve the task at faster, easier and convenient manner. However, the dark sides of such development cannot be ignored. There are physical, psychological and socialisation damages may block the interaction between people. Therefore, it is recommended that people should aware of the consequences and use such devices in an appropriate manner.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 273, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'communicating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: communicating
...o this globalisation, companies require to communicate with oversea department. The use of com...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...uld be the physical damages such as bad eye sight, backache and fatigue. Furthermore, the...
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Line 6, column 493, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate manner" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...f the consequences and use such devices in an appropriate manner.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228438228438 0.247107183377 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.156177156177 0.155533422707 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104895104895 0.0946595960268 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0629370629371 0.0501214627716 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.018648018648 0.0437548338989 43% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104895104895 0.122226691241 86% => OK
Participles: 0.048951048951 0.0403226058552 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.41739042401 2.80594681477 122% => OK
Infinitives: 0.018648018648 0.0326793684256 57% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.102564102564 0.0861772015684 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.032634032634 0.021408717616 152% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.004662004662 0.011925033212 39% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2543.0 1933.35771543 132% => OK
No of words: 373.0 316.048096192 118% => OK
Chars per words: 6.81769436997 6.12580529183 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20517956788 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.447721179625 0.374742101984 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.361930294906 0.28420135186 127% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.26273458445 0.203846283523 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.217158176944 0.137316102897 158% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41739042401 2.80594681477 122% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501340482574 0.56093040696 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.6907704661 60.7387585426 88% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0891783567 174% => OK
Sentence length: 13.3214285714 20.7743622355 64% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.5880081513 49.517814964 46% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8214285714 127.492653851 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3214285714 20.7743622355 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.357142857143 0.814263465372 44% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 49.514458062 49.1944974215 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.60784313725 1.69124875643 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46288892961 0.332605444948 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0973518141801 0.102741220458 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0989619083307 0.0668466124924 148% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.493329095606 0.534860350844 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125598368452 0.148594505496 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153598994999 0.134430193775 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758115783053 0.0742795772207 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281519736066 0.324371583561 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0901195243503 0.0638462369009 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278132649516 0.228012699653 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0934738035783 0.058150111329 161% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.68436873747 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 10.4468937876 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.