The cart below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of world.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Submitted by Nigaris on Fri, 01/06/2017 - 21:13

Essay topic : The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company .
What can companies do to increase staff productivity?

It is an evidence-based fact that the capacity of workforce is one of the substantial factors of the rising economy of a company. There are a variety of ways how to enhance the quality of work and service, which this essay will discuss.

To begin, the working time of employees will be more efficient leading to higher level of output, if they are fitter and less stressed. By subsidizing memberships of gyms and sports clubs, employers can motivate their workers to be healthier, and thus more effective at work due to the fact that a work/life balance of a worker will be improved.

Overall, by using of health-related subsidies, some rewards to salaries, and ongoing trainings an enterprise can encourage its employees to be more assiduous to produce useful results at work.

On the other hand, companies can use different financial rewards as a driving force factor in order to achieve a high productivity. With this purpose, employers might set annual target-related payments, such as pay increments, perks, bonuses, or incentives for those who have achieved aimed milestones. These workers' names can be announced in the performance reviews and appraisals, creating rivalry among employees, which leads to being more committed.

Providing regular training and having job prospects are other indispensable elements in efficacy of a worker. In fact, all employees are seeking for the opportunities to further their career and acquire more knowledge without leaving work. Cosequently, it is reasonable to have on the job trainings and internship programmes for career progression, because the more the rate of a job satisfaction, the better the productivity of a company. Recent research conducted in Baku has shown that among all local businesses the most sucsessful one is AF business center which provides monthly trainings with foreign teachers and professors in business and economy field, for instance.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, thus, for instance, in fact, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 965.302439024 182% => OK
No of words: 329.0 196.424390244 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34042553191 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06892434847 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 106.607317073 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601823708207 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 283.868780488 191% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0597523497 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 3.83414634146 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0406330186592 0.215688989381 19% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0141997079976 0.103423049105 14% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0188232565239 0.0843802449381 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0171626015424 0.15604864568 11% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201270985095 0.0819641961636 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 61.2550243902 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.06136585366 125% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 40.7170731707 270% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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