What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Being satisfy from cultural aspect is necessary for people. It affects people’s life style and perspective. It provides different ways such as reading book, discussing intellectual topics, going some places where improve your cultural aspect. One of the places are theatre and I think for my city theatre would build and It is the best choice for people who is my age. In my essay I will explain two arguments why the change must be building theatre.
Firstly, in my city there is no theatre and some people have never seen a theatre. On the other hand, others who have been a theatre think it is so good because sometimes theatre makes people fun and sometimes it makes people upset so theatre has a lot different emotions. For example, last week I met with my high school friends and we talked about theatre. Almost all of them have good thoughts about theatre. They went to theatre in neighboor city. But for most people in my city going to the city is diffucult because It is far away. I think If a theatre would be in my city most people would like it. That is why I think building a theatre in my city is a good idea.
Secondly the fact that, most people in my age will interested in theatre and my city earn a lot of money through theatre and the money that are earned by theatre can use to improve facilities other areas in my city. For example, some public buildings are old and they could reconstruct and lack of facility in some families cause that their children do not go to school. I think the money could give the families. That is why I feel this way.
To sum up, due to being interesting for young people and improving my city’s facility building theatre is a good decision for my city. I think with young people most other ages intereste in theatre. This is important for evaluating to cultural aspect.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'interest'
Suggestion: interest
...e fact that, most people in my age will interested in theatre and my city earn a lot of mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, i think, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53153153153 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42559748573 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477477477477 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.5968378459 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.45 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0925291532144 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0301315900479 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326677172796 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.063334592294 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270565654956 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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