Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people think it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment for people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It true that governments worldwide have been working hard determining the best budget allocation mix between preventing future and treating current illnesses. Although the proposal of financing treatment initiatives appears legitimate, the government should prioritize the promotion of a healthy lifestyle.

There are a great number of reasons why the government should subsidize health-promoting plans. First,Some healthy lifestyle instructions would act an deterrent for the suffering of some serious conditions in citizens.In fact If Citizens are instructed to follow a dietary plans appropriately by the government, they will not be vulnerable to some food borne diseases especially cancers and diabetes. Second, Spending money on preventative approach would provide a sustanable long-term enviroment for the develepment of young future generations. In fact the government’s capital investment in curbing carbon footprint would contribute to the process of restoration of the green enviroment, decreasing the number of individuals affected by respiratory diseases.

There are also several reasons why governmental disbursement on curative approach would culminate in some nagative financial repercussions. First, The successful treatment for people with some cripping conditions is invariably associated with the purchase of expensive medical facilities. This would demand for a great deal of governmental budget allocation, which would imposes some serious financial burbens. In addition, some current conditions are sometimes difficult to cure even despite the support of modern medical technologies. This means that if the government keep pouring money on eradicating these diseases, it would just be a waste of money.

In conclusion, it is highly recommended that the government focus on preventative path due to its positive long-terms impacts on citizens’s health.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, in addition, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.12781954887 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37421460681 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635338345865 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0892853806 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.833333333 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142801116586 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499701022569 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374038477848 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741310265381 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343832367908 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 50.2224549098 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.27 12.4159519038 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.78 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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