Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same ways as the davertising of cigarette is. Do you agree or disagree.
Many people think that the overconsumption of food can cause similar damage to human health like smoking so the governments should impose a ban on the advertising of both some food items and cigarette. While the former view is well-founded, I still believe that it is unreasonable to prohibit all forms of advertising of some certain food products.
On the one hand, it is understandable why many people argue that the excessive consumption of food is a grave detriment to people’s health conditions like smoking is.First, excessive food intake inscrease body fat, which negatively affects human’s health and potentially results in obesity. Overeating and sedentary lifestyle of many individuals are principal causes for the fact that the number of obese people has increased at unprecedented rates in recent years, gradually putting human ‘s life at risk. Second, consuming a large amount of unhealthy food such as fast food or processed food on regular basis oftentimes carries more potential health risks. Specifically, this could heighten the danger of having numerous health-related problems such as blood pressure of high cholesteron, gradually deteriorating people’s well-being.
On the other hand , I still believe that governments should not implement prohibition of advertisements for some certain food items. Advertising is an effective way that most food manufacturers use to promote their products in order to approach prospective customers.If their commercials underwent a prohibitive order by law, their profits would decline significantly without publicity materials, pushing those companies to the verge of bankruptcy. This would lead to a rise in the umemployment rate and negatively affect the national economic expansion. Additionally, prohibiting the advertising of certain items is an obvious disadvantage for consumers a they will not be well-informed about the products they really want to purchase.
In conclusion, while overeating exerts several negative effects on human’ s health conditions, the governments shold not impose a ban on the advertisements of some certain foodstuffs
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, second, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74132492114 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36604337648 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608832807571 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4530236681 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.454545455 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8181818182 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172771594641 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691695731944 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440470275348 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113077530131 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317384293799 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.6 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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