technology effecting individual and society.do you agree?

These days, there is a controversial debate about the impacts of modern technologies on individual’s life and the society. There are a great number of individual who interpret impacts of these technologies as thoroughly constructive, while others hold an opponent view. I am inclined to believe that modern technologies are beneficial and should be promoted.

There are several reasons why the state-of-the-art technologies are advantageous. First of all, it argued that high-tech facilities play a pivotal role in creating adroit people. This is attributed to the fact that such technologies could foster the economy and energy efficiency across the globe, therefore, individuals would create a feeling of accomplishment and competence, which consequently open avenues to new achievements so that people’s enthusiasm and determination will be amplified towards many daunting tasks. Innovation of high-speed mobile phones, even unprivileged areas could communicate with their families around the world.

In addition, it is claimed that some measure can be taken by governments to stimulate people to sufficient usage of technology. This is to say that these technologies could be introduced through practical presentation such as seminar and projects, which would instill strong feeling of self-esteem in individuals so that they are more likely to perform up to expectations in society. Specifically, a research study conducted by Yale university in 2015 has found that high-tech technologies could enhance a person’s intellectual ability to make decisions related to social and personal life.

In conclusion, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that state-of-the-art technologies enhance the efficiency and effectiveness of peoples’ evaluation and increases the individual’s confidence. It is expected that governments take cognizance of these facts and begin to adopt this way of training.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
PTE_Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: individuals
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Suggestion:
...s related to social and personal life. In conclusion, the foregoing discussion ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 5.94088669951 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 20.9802955665 110% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1207.87684729 137% => OK
No of words: 279.0 242.827586207 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94265232975 5.00649968141 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.59548412179 2.71678728327 132% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 139.433497537 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 379.143842365 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.325123152709 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.614565858 50.4703680194 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.166666667 104.977214359 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.9669160288 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.25397266985 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 6.9802955665 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194372221645 0.242375264174 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069510840599 0.0925447433944 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063175341531 0.071462118173 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121880217798 0.151781067708 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455004716912 0.0609392437508 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 12.6369458128 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 53.1260098522 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.9458128079 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.47 11.5310837438 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.32886699507 122% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 55.0591133005 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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