Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
It is a highly debated issue whether it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. The world is indeed having a much faster pace than before. Due to the technological development, young people now need to deal with more things at once. Therefore, I agree that young people must equip with planing and organizing ability to survive and manage the complexity in life.
The rapid technological development lowers the learning barrier which means young people have to self-learn more things in order to be competitive. For example, in the past, people can only learn foreign languages by reading books borrowed from the library or physically attend a foreign language class hence not a lot of people possess language proficiency. In contrast, in modern world, there are plenty online learning platforms which leads to a higher foreign language level. In order to stay competitive, young people need to put more efforts on language studying while at school. Thus, if young people are lack of time planing skills, they would fail to maintain their school works and the self-learning foreign language schedule.
Besides, the technological development brings much more information to people hence young people need the ability to organize so as to digest and make good use of the information. Thanks to the critical improvement in internet and social media, it is easier to find a bunch of information on the internet. For example, when people want to travel in the past, they usually just go to the travel agency and make them do all the work. However, nowadays, there is abundant potential resource on the internet, so if young people want to take a trip now, they would probably find attractions recommendations on trip advisor, direction on google maps, hotels on trivago, flight tickets on skyscanner, and countless of travel diaries on blogs. Without the ability to organize the huge amount of information, young people could not successfully arrange the whole trip and may be end up frustrated.
To sum up, given the fact that rapid technological developments resulting in faster pace in life, young people are required to plan ahead and organize things in order to stay competitive and make good use of the information in modern life. Consequently, I am in favor of the idea that it is essential for young people to hold the ability to plan and organize.
- Integrated Writing TPO46 76
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ung people need the ability to organize so as to digest and make good use of the informa...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, in contrast, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01256281407 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80204380022 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505025125628 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3729590114 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6875 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36748593949 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13470118223 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125966583856 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262532879618 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127323595417 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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