Some people believe that academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
According to some, high school learners should be instilled with academic knowledge, while others consider that they ought to gain practical experience, such as repairing cars or learning cooking skills. In my opinion, subjects such as physics and history are compulsory for those who pursue intellectual jobs, while having pragmatic skills, such as cookery or car repair, is appropriate for those who seek jobs which require manual skills.
To begin with, having an academic syllabus in the school curriculum is mandatory for those who are already decided in their future job and they are keen in having the appropriate knowledge which will ensure them with the job of their dreams. For instance, before having medical credentials and practice medicine with the aim of contributing on the welfare of the individuals, one needs to gain firstly the amount and the type of knowledge required for being able to have a degree in medicine. As a result, they will learn theory about physiopathology and about the diseases and means of curing them as well, and only after having instilled this information, they are allowed to hone their skills by being trained in hospitals under the supervision of their elders' peers.
On the other hand, subjects such as cookery or car mechanics ought to be also learned as the society demand of this trades is on the increase. In other words, the actual standard of living cannot be maintained stable if the people do not learn how to repair cars or cook meals at an expert level. For example, in order to enjoy the facilities that modern society provides to its citizens, more youngsters ought to be enrolled in these training courses. Hence, owing a car which is working properly or being provided with a good quality food is a crucial requirement of a reasonable standard of living.
To sum up, I believe that young people ought to study the subjects they are inclined to, and that offer them the sufficient information and pragmatic skills to follow their dreams and enjoy their passions.
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- Some people believe that academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking. Discuss both 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96470588235 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61827487514 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555882352941 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6175932455 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.8 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0 20.7667163134 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.5 7.06120827912 262% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183120344236 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755583573435 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544796063219 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112492326172 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546571641261 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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