Nowadays many young people are often spending their free time in a shopping center. This has a negative effect on the youth and the society to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.
Nowadays, most juveniles and young adults are spending their leisure time in a shopping centre, and some become a shopaholic. This brings the negative effect on themselves and the development of the whole nations due to the fact that they are the future generation of a country.
To begin with, in the present day, there is increasing concern over the appearance of an individual. For instance, women are likely to have a tendency to buy an expensive dress or jewellery as accessories to help them have a good looking and gain more confident when standing in front of others people. Furthermore, with the advancement of technology and social media, numerous youngsters are easily knowing what their favourite singers or actors dress up. Then, they try to imitate them and buy these expensive clothes by using their parent’s money.
Subsequently, spending so much time and money in a shopping mall lead an individual become addicted to this activity in long run. As a result, they have less valuable time to spend with their family and the opportunity to extend their knowledge by reading books or learning new languages. Moreover, they also miss the opportunity to participate in some social activities such as volunteering which lead to the lack of social skills that helpful in developing their career. On the economy point of views, people who spend too much money on shopping may lead to overwhelming with debt.
In summary, in my opinion, instead of shopping or gossiping, an individual should spend their free time on useful activities such as volunteering or read more books which help them gain more experience to develop a better career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, look, may, moreover, so, then, well, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06934306569 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80699644601 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569343065693 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2999087422 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.272727273 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196222910778 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752518951046 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461527997919 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122894466057 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486793257677 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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