Nowadays, there is increasing concern over the equality between men and women in the same occupation. However, there is some position that is well-fitted for man and vice-versa. I agree with this idea due to the fact that men and women have different ability to fit in a different occupation.
To begin with, in the past, men have a responsibility to be a sole breadwinner of the family due to the stronger and healthier body while women were in charge of household chores. For example, in a traditional family, husbands tend to work different jobs in a society to earn money in order to bring the higher living standard for their families such as driving or hunting. On the other hand, wives stayed at home to fulfil household duties as well as looking after children.
However, a substantial change is witnessed in recent years. Nowadays, due to the higher expectation from living standard and educational for children, both parents have a tendency to have their own careers. As a result, the income is doubled and wives have not to put under pressure to sacrifice their career for the housework. In addition, the children also receive a more quality educational system which is a well prepared for their future career. However, although both parents become breadwinners, they contribute to the workforce in a different way which appropriates to their ability. For example, a woman has a tendency to choose to become a receptionist, teacher or assistant due to the appealing and sociable in communication skills which are clearly better than man. Meanwhile, husbands in the present day tend to pursue their career as an engineer or a doctor.
In conclusion, in my opinion, there are some jobs which are well-fitted for women while others for men regardless of the time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 537, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97288135593 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88088929422 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538983050847 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.916618679 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.785714286 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0714285714 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26577107747 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887442516666 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862912763034 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201774552103 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961857315439 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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