Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The passage indicates that Arctic deer populations are declining in accordance with the hunters' reports. The author uses the coincidence of global warming and the drop in the number of this animal to conclude that the decrease mentioned above is the result of their inability to find their former migration pattern to have foods. While the text has some argumentative statements which might seem reasonable at first glance, further considerations show some vital flaws in them.
first, the author assumes that the cycle of cold and mild weather is a default situation and based on this fact he states that melting the sea ice is a crucial phenomenon for the life of the deers. he fails to explain what is the normal behaviour of deer when the warm periods are extended. It is possible that by the extension of the warm periods, the need to migrate to another place disappeared, and the animal stays in the same island for the rest of the year.
Moreover, the writer fails to explain why the reports of the hunters are trustable? how many deers may be counted by the hunters? how many hunters are questioned, and what is the percentage of the drop in the number of deers? deers may find some new islands that are vacant from any hunters. Hence, the hunters presume that the number of deers is declined and died.
Besides, the coincidence of global warming with a purported decline in deer populations does not provide adequate evidence to conclude that they lose their usual migration pattern. The happening of the two events at the same time does not present sufficient logic to correlate them without any more investigations. There may so many other reasons play a role in this incident. For example, an increase in the rate of illegal hunting, epidemic illness, increase in predators population which lead to the reduction of the baits could be the other logical issues that cause this event.
All in all, the author should employ more evidence and data to corroborate his claims. he should address to which extend the hunters reports is valid, are other causes of the animals' fatality considered and further the migration behavior of deers in longer warm-periods.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1764 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.78 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.498 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.213 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.643 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...ns show some vital flaws in them. first, the author assumes that the cycle of c...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...l phenomenon for the life of the deers. he fails to explain what is the normal beh...
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Line 9, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...e reports of the hunters are trustable? how many deers may be counted by the hunter...
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Line 9, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...ny deers may be counted by the hunters? how many hunters are questioned, and what i...
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Line 9, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Deers
...age of the drop in the number of deers? deers may find some new islands that are vaca...
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Line 9, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e number of deers is declined and died. Besides, the coincidence of global warmi...
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Line 17, column 88, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...nce and data to corroborate his claims. he should address to which extend the hunt...
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Line 17, column 176, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...ports is valid, are other causes of the animals fatality considered and further the mig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92682926829 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57881257706 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533875338753 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8964688054 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.941176471 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7058823529 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76470588235 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153937343155 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459206522223 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419640517504 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788686094044 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302799241305 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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