“During the past year, Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts believe that a significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents is fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Alta and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that our employees will get adequate amounts of sleep.
The experts claims that by reducing time of shift the safety incidents of Alta Manufacturing can be bring down . Sated in this way , the argument fails to mention several key factors , reveal several instance of poor terminology and distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and providing week comparison with company whose working hours is less . However careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals hat it provides littel creditable support for the experts’s conclusion . Hence , the arguments seems incomplete or unsbustantiated .
To begin , are the manufacturing product is similar in both the companies ? or in the other words , are both companies belongs from the same manufacturing industry ? . Its is possible that Panoply industry working in very soft industry like FMCG or Pharmaceutical where as alta working industry is very heavy like production of steel pipe or production of trucks . As both industry have very distinct products , job of humans may be different . Person in the soft industry like FMCG generally working in the AC and have very low physical stress whereas labour in steel pipe manufacturing company workes in very high temperature , noisey and dustful enviornment . Therefore ,if production wise physical stress on the human per hour different then experts should not compare them self with industries which are working in same sector .
Secondly , Is both company have same humane intervention in procees or machinery ? . Considering both works in the same sector , there is chance that one has full automatic production assembly leading to use human for reparining and supervision purpose only whereas other is semi automatic industry where people need to continuously work with machine by arranging product in machine , put products and giving command . Due to full automation , worker doesn’t have to carry out risky task which inturn reduce safety incidents . If the scenario exit then reducing time of shift will not bring impactful result .
Lastly , Is human force to production is same in both industries ? or in other worlds , Is work load is analogous in both company ? For instance , if human force to production ration is quite low compare to Panoply industry , then it’s affect human physically and mentally . Employee occupied with lot of work in their plate have very high chance of making mistake during their work and even avoid taking brakes to meet the demands of employer . This mistakes may be converted into fatality due to lack attecntion during work .
In conclusion , the argument stand know is considerably flaw due to its reliance on several unwanted assumptions . If experts consider above three question and provide proper evidence , then its fully possible to evaluate viability of the proposed recommendation to reduce working hours.
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e-rater score report
Also need to argue "Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Alta and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that our employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2286 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.207 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.493 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.292 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3698630137 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86946885486 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529680365297 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3540981464 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 47.0 5.25449101796 894% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149021177255 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456750844533 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329943387141 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792686157474 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375799163194 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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