the following appeared in a letter to the director of the department fo motor vehicles:
"The use of cell phones while driving is a source of great concern to the community, particularly to parents with young children. Teenage drivers, who are the most likely to text or talk on the phone while driving, are among the most dangerous. In out county alone there were 75 fatalities from traffic collisions. If we raise the legal driving age from 16 to 20, thr problem would largely be solved because the most dangerous drivers would no longer be on the road."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to assess the reasonableness of both the prediction and the argument upon which it is based. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the argument provided in a letter to the Director of the Department of Mother Vehicales is it concluded that if the legal age to drive was raised from 16 to 20, the use of cell phones while driving would be largely solved. The author bases this conclusion on teenagers being the most dangerous drivers. The author failed to consider how many people over the age of 20 text while driving, adding to this problem. Due to unsupported evidence, however, the argument is not logically persusave. More information is needed to evaluate this prediction.
The letter states that in our county alone there were 75 fatalities from traffic collisions. The author implies that these were from teenage drivers that were texting, but we do not know if this is true or not, and offers no direct support for this. Evidence as in the age of the drivers, what the reason for the crash was, and if a cell phone was involved would be needed to elvauate this statement.
The author fails to consider if texting and driving was legal or illegal. At one time people using cell phones while driving was never a problem because cell phones did not exist. One question that needs to answered is when this letter was sent. Was texting and driving illegal at the time? If not, would making it against the law fix the problem rather than raising the driving age?
To strengthen this argument, addition evidence about whether or not teenage drivers are really the most likely to text or talk on the phone while driving. Where did this statistic come from? Are teenage drivers the most dangerous? The author assumes a lot of information but has no prof behind the statements. If these accusations are true, evidence will need to be provided.
Without answers to these specific questions, the argument and prediction in this letter are both not persusave. Additional evidence is needed to concluded that raising the driving age would solve the cell phone usage problem while driving.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Due to unsupported evidence, however, the argument is not logically persusave.
Error: persusave Suggestion: persuade
Sentence: Evidence as in the age of the drivers, what the reason for the crash was, and if a cell phone was involved would be needed to elvauate this statement.
Error: elvauate Suggestion: evaluate
Sentence: Without answers to these specific questions, the argument and prediction in this letter are both not persusave.
Error: persusave Suggestion: persuade
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Need to analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
Teenage drivers, who are the most likely to text or talk on the phone while driving, are among the most dangerous.
condition 2:
In out county alone there were 75 fatalities from traffic collisions.
conclusion:
If we raise the legal driving age from 16 to 20, the problem would largely be solved because the most dangerous drivers would no longer be on the road.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1582 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.694 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.345 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.073 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 551, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is needed to evaluate this prediction. The letter states that in our county alo...
^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...ving illegal at the time? If not, would making it against the law fix the problem rath...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 55, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... this argument, addition evidence about whether or not teenage drivers are really the most lik...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83382789318 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43371566494 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501483679525 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2065742076 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.45 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.05 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16602824717 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549954853029 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571271475603 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105786843027 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334583155486 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.