The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice for a client.
"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author recommends investment in consolidated Industries because oil, the company sells, is primary source to heat house and continuously freezing climate. however, several questions need answering to check the claim.
The author claims that oil is the major source for heating house. however, there are many alternative ways to keep warm, such as electronics heaters, coals, and simply wearing more clothes. Besides, these alternative solutions could be cheaper than oil. The author is suggested to offer the cost of possible solutions to strengthen his or her claim. For example, maybe among all solutions, oil has lowest cost to generate heat, so we use it as a main source to heat house and this makes sense to consider the possibility to invest oil related company. however, if another way is economical, such as, the cost of electronic heater is cheaper than oil. it obviously does not make sense to invest oil.
Even if the oil is the most efficient source to heat houses, how much we could benefit to invest a retailer company? For instance, the price of oil could cut half because we invest them, this could be undoubted beneficial. however, if there is just 1% price cutting, it is barely to persuade the invest could be worthy. As we known, retailer profit is pretty low compared to the manufacturer, because there are lots of retailers to sell products. For example, Apple retailer only benefit 3% of base, however the headquarter, in charge of design, gain 60 to 70% of total income. therefore, more justification and evidence is required to fortify the reasons to invest oil company.
The letter mentions that the last reason for heating is 90 days with below-normal temperatures and predicted to continue for more years. The weather prediction credibility or background is not elaborated. because who and how to do the prediction is crucial. For example, if a awesome reputation weather center has many successful experiences in the past, it would be reliable to trust. however, if a college student major in climate does a rough prediction without adequate prediction model and necessary equipment, the result could be doubtful. therefore, the background of the forecaster and the prediction methodology is required to provide to consolidate the claims.
The author needs to answer the above questions to strength his or her argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1908 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.349 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.63 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ouse and continuously freezing climate. however, several questions need answering to ch...
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Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... is the major source for heating house. however, there are many alternative ways to kee...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 395, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'has the lowest'.
Suggestion: has the lowest
...example, maybe among all solutions, oil has lowest cost to generate heat, so we use it as ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...sibility to invest oil related company. however, if another way is economical, such as,...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... electronic heater is cheaper than oil. it obviously does not make sense to invest...
^^
Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...em, this could be undoubted beneficial. however, if there is just 1% price cutting, it ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...price cutting, it is barely to persuade the invest could be worthy. As we known, retailer ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'knew'?
Suggestion: knew
...suade the invest could be worthy. As we known, retailer profit is pretty low compared...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 509, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tailer only benefit 3% of base, however the headquarter, in charge of design, gain 60 to 70% of...
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Line 7, column 579, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...design, gain 60 to 70% of total income. therefore, more justification and evidence is req...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fy the reasons to invest oil company. The letter mentions that the last reason...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 217, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...bility or background is not elaborated. because who and how to do the prediction is cru...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 286, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... prediction is crucial. For example, if a awesome reputation weather center has m...
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Line 9, column 398, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...he past, it would be reliable to trust. however, if a college student major in climate ...
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Line 9, column 558, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...quipment, the result could be doubtful. therefore, the background of the forecaster and t...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12694300518 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83071842313 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525906735751 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1928555476 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9545454545 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5454545455 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173295189567 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508755185477 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548221723637 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807084437844 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477871118758 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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