The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author made a strong conclusion after giving some points. At first glance, the conclusion seems very tenable, however, after proper scrutinizing of the points the author gave, it shows that there are certain questions that needs to be answered.
First, the author made a point that people who enrolled in online degree programs by a nearby university increased by 50 percent. The author failed to let us know what the exact figure is. “50 percent” increase can be a high increment or a little, for instance, 1000 students to 1500 students is a notable increment, it can also mean increment from 3 to 6 student which is very negligible. Furthermore, does the author know exactly what Omni did to have increased number of students? Without answering the question of the exact amount of increment, the conclusion is flawed.
Secondly, the author pointed out the fact that expenditures for dormitory and classroom space reduced most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. Is the author certain that is the reason expenditure reduced? It could be that the school already has standard dormitory and there is no need to spend money again. Until the author answers the question about this, the point remains flawed.
Thirdly, the author also said enrolment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with the budget deficit. The author failed to let us know the reason the enrolment has failed to grow. Is the fees of the school too high? Does Humana produce good and reputable alumni? Is the standard education provided at Humana? Is the budget properly managed? There’re so many reasons that could cause Humana university not to grow and bad management of the budget. Without answer to these questions, the conclusion once again is flawed.
Finally, the author suggests that Humana University, should do the same thing that Omni university did to increase their student. It worked for Omni university, is the author certain that it is going to work for Humana University? Does Humana university meet all the prerequisite that Omni has, to grow? As it is now the conclusion is flawed and to make it stronger, answers to these questions has to be provided.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1825 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.841 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.508 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.895 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.348 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 366, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'student' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'students'.
Suggestion: students
... it can also mean increment from 3 to 6 student which is very negligible. Furthermore, ...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 415, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to these questions has to be provided.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05585106383 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67620201202 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51329787234 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9981674747 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.652173913 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.347826087 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223220542866 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607144942735 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797175814695 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11761606638 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948429893104 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.