A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.
“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”
The memorandum presented by the movie producer states the issues related with the movie which being directed by the first time director who only has experience of shooting commercials for a shampoo company. The memo states that there is need to incerease the movie funding by 10% in order to ensure a quality product but if there were knowing that the movie director is inexperienced and has no experience of shooting movies then why they signed that director? Was there any need of signing that particular director? While the reasons are not stated related to this query. To increase the movie funding is a huge decision which might cost a lot of money and such decision should not be made precipitously.
Why one would sign a director who have no earlier experience to direct a movie which will cost a lot of money? It's ok if they are just trying out some new director but then is such condition there should not be a lot of investment in such projects. In this case a movie director only has experience of shooting the commercial for a shampoo company and we know that the advertising buisness is notoriously wasteful and they are inured to shoot a scence in one take. So it is a matter of concern that whether he/she will be able to shoot take after take without concern for how much time is being spent on the one scene. More reasons need to be presented before jumping onto any conclusion that why such director was signed?
The memo states that company also saved a lot of money by hiring inexperienced assitant directors and producers and this saving in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If this will be the scenario then its better to take pre-measures for them rahter than spending the on the actors and the crew. What it takes for the assitant producers and directors for arranging things so that ohters have to wait for it? Why the team hired the inexperienced assitant producers and directors knowing that they already have the inexperienced movie director?
Rather than discussing how to increase the budget and get the extra money so that the movie will not be a failure, the reasons behind signing the inexperienced director and the assistant director, producer should be explained clearly. The movie project involves a lot of money in it and before spending more money on it every reason behind that spending should be listed properly. While the memo lacks in providing the exact reasons for their shortcomings and the demand of incresing the money, the movie producer should look for more reasons that why they are needing more money.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2241 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.728 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.55 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.817 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[2]
Message: The verb know is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'knew'
Suggestion: knew
...o ensure a quality product but if there were knowing that the movie director is inexperience...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...o ensure a quality product but if there were knowing that the movie director is inexperience...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 518, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed of signing that particular director? While the reasons are not stated related to t...
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Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: IT_IS[8]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...a movie which will cost a lot of money? Its ok if they are just trying out some new...
^^^
Line 5, column 668, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assitant producers and directors knowing that they already have the inexperienced...
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Line 7, column 558, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...uld look for more reasons that why they are needing more money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80126849894 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58413226959 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418604651163 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.7643016775 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.588235294 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8235294118 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52941176471 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281790845949 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108081467276 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940517496288 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198444551862 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104193353876 0.0628817314937 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.