The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Young people are the backbone of the society and they play an important role in leading the society as a political leader, industrial leader etc. It is important that they should have a sense of cooperation among them and they should not compete with each other.
Competition keeps the youth busy in following the already established standard and prevent them from exploring new things. For example, When students compete with each other to get a better grade, they stick to the established curriculum by the school to secure a good grade and does not put the focus on exploring new things. Whereas when students have sense of cooperation among them, they work together and bring innovative ideas and it helps in their overall growth.
Leaders are responsible for leading the society to a better future. So all leaders have same goal, the well being of the society hence it is very important that they should cooperate with each other in order to build effective policies, develop solution to a problem because when leaders cooperate, they discuss the pros and cons of a solution which prevents any ineffective solutions from getting implemented. For example today, the world is facing the threat of terrorism and many nations are working together to couter it, such as India, USA, England etc. So if they compete with each other to prove that the plan developed by an individual country is better than other then it would have been impossible to reduce the act of terrorism to this extent.
Some may argue that competition brings a greed of success and drive the people to work hard, it is true that competition makes us give more effort to a cause but a group effort will usually have more positive result than individual efforts hence putting efforts in cooperation will lead the society to a greater good.
In the view of the above mentioned points, I agree that the best way to prepare the youth for leadership in different fields is by instilling a sense of cooperation among them not a sense of competition.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 668, Rule ID: OTHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'other than'?
Suggestion: other than
...by an individual country is better than other then it would have been impossible to reduce...
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Line 5, column 674, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...individual country is better than other then it would have been impossible to reduce...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...f terrorism to this extent. Some may argue that competition brings a greed of succ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well', 'whereas', 'for example', 'such as', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22972972973 0.238963963785 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.17027027027 0.154291517835 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0945945945946 0.0886310499679 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0378378378378 0.0506014161523 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0567567567568 0.0449626384858 126% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12972972973 0.123526278965 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0432432432432 0.0379742944744 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54712181293 2.82910677849 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0378378378378 0.0316879551592 119% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0014075125626 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.118918918919 0.0950106342287 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0189189189189 0.0245489744465 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0108108108108 0.0157978311181 68% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2024.0 2899.98275862 70% => OK
No of words: 346.0 478.390804598 72% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84971098266 6.0591788892 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.65681771538 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.329479768786 0.369966551584 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260115606936 0.285172536893 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14161849711 0.207245337619 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109826589595 0.136322040163 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54712181293 2.82910677849 90% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 234.298850575 77% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523121387283 0.492565540709 106% => OK
Word variations: 55.6249837878 56.8184620615 98% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 21.1264367816 52% => OK
Sentence length: 31.4545454545 23.7468607788 132% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.9204149593 62.0618507366 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 184.0 143.81877709 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4545454545 23.7468607788 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.09090909091 0.728815259664 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.87931034483 102% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.71264367816 39% => OK
Readability: 57.4661061482 52.2641144681 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.52040816327 1.64547068916 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411813423602 0.39480681544 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.125042037839 0.11556216369 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0632611558616 0.0736162880345 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.679557021658 0.531340600358 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.180630460718 0.15197228837 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193109502655 0.158818324754 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100566686702 0.0851127212816 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301999377156 0.388921930462 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0545073230975 0.0677916285025 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280659302321 0.28015025965 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111200074309 0.0610219844235 182% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.8591954023 83% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30459770115 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.96264367816 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.10632183908 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.93390804598 51% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.04597701149 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 15.0862068966 60% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 3.0 Out of 6