The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement that society must instill in its youngsters a sense of cooperation than competition is a claim that is highly agreeable. While it is true that competition does encourage people to push themselves out of their comfort zones and to do better, most of the times, cooperation proves to be a better solution.
To illustrate, in today's world, with technology and innovation growing at its fastest pace, there is a blatant need for intelligent youngsters to solve arising problems. However, nothing can be achieved if we teach these young adults to only compete with each others instead of working together. Take the case of the Fast Breed Reactors that India and Russia have been working on together. With a surfeit of energy requirement, nuclear energy seems to be the best solution moving forward and taking note of this, Russia lended its Nuclear technology to India for its betterment. And in turn, India, working on the Reactor technology was able to develop a high-functioning, efficient system which provides very large power output that proves beneficial to both the countries. This is a prime example of how cooperation could burgeon growth in countries that choose to work together than against.
Furthermore, sharing of knowledge and technology is on the rise nowadays. People are realising what five brains can do instead of one and are encouraging students to work in teams to solve problems, be it in a classroom or in the corporate world. For example, it was both Einstein and Bose who formulated the Bose-Einstein equations of general relativity. If either one of them had decided to not contribute in this coalition and had chosen to instead treat the other as their rival, the much celebrated equation in physics would not have seen daylight. Continually, the immense amount of work carried out with that particular equation as a precedent would not have been possible. This also goes on to show what cooperation can achieve and how it can lead to iterative innovations.
In contrast however, competition has always been proved to be a catalyst in betterment and growth of people. Youngsters competing against each other allows them to continually push themselves towards becoming better versiosn of themselves. Mangalyaan was India's mars mission and challenged USA's Curosity rover in exhibiting efficiency at a much lower cost of production. This mutual competition also lead to very creative innovation from both sides as it pushed them to do better than the other. In turn, the outcome of such a competition was the production of two supersystems that are now the sole two rovers that are exploring Mars. A point to be noted is that in this case, competition turned out to be the flame that ignited both countries to put their best foot forward in terms of innnovation.
In conclusion, both cooperation and competition aren't necessarily two different entities but more or less two faces of the same coin that lead to innovation booms but while contrasting the two, in most situations, cooperation does prove to be a better step to move forward than competition and the youngsters of the world must be encourage to work together than against each other.
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- Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish. 62
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 83
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 33
- A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 66
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 58
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, it is true, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06451612903 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90374169121 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500948766603 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8627329854 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.095238095 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0952380952 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111602960313 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0333897150921 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399270087158 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0630509797941 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313535543948 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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