The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Throughout the history, we, as human beings, have not been succesful of stemming our instinct features while constructing a society together. Therefore, the notion of competition is manifested through society, especially the ones who try to accomplish some successes in their lives. On the other hand, cooperation is showed itself as something that is constructed for the well-being of the society. Therefore, i believe that coorperation is a better understanding of forming a leadership notion in young people minds rather than the competition that builds up a society that becomes a set of self-oriented beings who endlessly try to reach their limits to be succesfull.
Currently the world that we are living is dominated with the notion of competition since we have it naturally. In the nature, survival of the fittest can be a rudimentary side of the competition. Moreover, capitalism drives us to be homo economicus individuals who act as a firm and manage themselves through compete with each other. Even though, this helps individuals and society as whole by driving people to do something better after each task, it is also considered as one of the reason of corruption in the societies. The dictators who have influenced the society throughout the history can be a perfect example for this situation.
On the other hand, cooperation is something that we formed as a society to live better and placidly. Cooperation can be considered as something that enchances us, feed us and presents us wide array of thoughts. Therefore, instilling the concept of cooperation to young people for leadership in different fields can be very efficient way to develop society and well-being for all. For example: Unlike Hitler, Ataturk who is the leader and the founder of Turkish Republic chose the cooperation side to promulgate his ideas to the society. His revolution is still dominated in Turkey unlike Hitler's short lasting existence.
To conclude, even though I believe that competition is a significant aspect of functioning society better, cooperation is a notion that restrict the pendulum of extreme sides and make a more placid environment to develop more rich ideas together.
The argument that Super Screen should increase its advertising to reach the public more, omits some considerable questions that should be addressed in order to asses the argument utterly. As it may be true, at first glance, that advertising can be beneficial to reach the public more, there are additional concerns must be scrutinized including defining vague and unstated target audience, percentage of positive reviews and the medium that are displayed.
Primarily, the author conveniently assumes that, percentage of positive reviews increased during the past year although fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies. Keeping all of this mind, we face with a question arises that is there any external factor such as economic recession that causes the declining of attendence. Therefore, we should examine the overall attendence of the movies that are released in this year from different production companies. If there is an overall declining, advertising may not be the solution for the reaching the public.
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 83
- The argument to be analyzed is as follows:The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.“According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people atten 24
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 83
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2713.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 508.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3405511811 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01090447475 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515748031496 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 856.8 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2343533138 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.19047619 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1904761905 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111487825739 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370724997472 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508265787334 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0563668285053 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437443835821 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 100.480337079 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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