The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

I would like to agree with the statement given, however only partially. there is a place and time for both, cooperation and competition, are two sides of the same coin, very closely related to each other, yet seem strikingly different.

Take for example, all the brick and mortar shops in India, selling all kinds of goods ranging from clothes to cell phones. A decade ago there was no competition to your local shops from anybody, they could charge you any amount and you wouldn't have any option other than to buy it. This was clearly due to lack of any competition to these guys. Fast forward to 2019, you can find a plethora of e-commerce websites dealing in the same goods as these shops. However, now when you go to the same shop and ask for the same commodity, you would notice that the quotations are very much in line with what the general consensus is. This could only be achieved through competition.

Now for a contrasting example, assume you are working in a company with a specific team of people working on developing a single product. Here the main goal is to finish the development of the product as soon as possible. In this situation, being cooperative and getting the product to market is the most rewarding for all. Sharing new revelations with the team that could speed up the process, or finishing your part of the job on or before deadline is paramount to the success of the team. If you are competitive in such a scenario, the effects could be detrimental for the team, not only you.

As you can see from the strikingly contrasting examples provided above, instilling in young people both, a sense of cooperation and competition is the best way to prepare them for leadership in various aspects of life. However by my reckoning, the characteristic that trumps these both is to know the right time and place to be either of them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: There
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...l kinds of goods ranging from clothes to cell phones. A decade ago there was no c...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...hey could charge you any amount and you wouldnt have any option other than to buy it. T...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
...ons are very much in line with what the general consensus is. This could only be achieved through...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 329.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6717325228 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6135399358 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568389057751 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.244226151 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.466666667 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206229680494 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624861137197 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878854553746 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133597425845 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918756357307 0.0667264976115 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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