The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
any field is a combination of leader and follower. they are the functional elements of any human social system. On any filed leader has the prime importance as he should have capacity to assemble a follower to shape any desired results in a process. coöperation plays an abstract glue which helps to bind this elements into striking effort. it can esure success in a field if only it able to success. For the best outcome. it is inevitable part of any field.
harmony is essential for the maintenance of the trust of followers to leader. a leader can prove is influential in the process only if he has a good bond with a fellow companion. harmony brings this environment in the group which is the direct result of individual cooperation in the group. Why harmony is needed in the process?. it is the main question that links why cooperation is recommended for leadership in any field? Since the leader has a responsibility to instruct followers and direct them to achieve specific goal. it can achieve if there is harmony presence in the group and cooperation facilitates it. Without harmony we cannot achieve bonding in the group and there is rife of conflict and resentment in a group which can cause anything but prosperiority in the group.
leader should be always a human who have mutaual respect for the companion and the human which should be equally respected by the follower. The respect can only be achieved if they have elected by the follower on the basis of cooperation between them rather than on a trivial competition. if it will be the case, there sure to be we feeling in the group and the direction, leader provides, will be the mark fo the follower and the success is certain in a group work. Otherwise, conspiracy can be seen and it is a certain reasons for the downfall of any group. In instance, Nelson mandela is the elected president in africa where he was elected mainly by cooperation even there was election. The efficiency was incredible in agroup work and it cannot be achieved if he had gone compettion for it.
In conclusion, competition is necessary only in the condition if there is need to sharpen the quality of the individual. However, leadership is a matter of vision, determination, trust, and mutual consent. The work will be fruitful if there is we feeling in a group which can be possible in a cooperation rather than competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75362318841 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84825936152 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437198067633 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1344095924 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.45833333333 5.21951772744 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11041697035 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446282192127 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585343011031 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680016966289 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016534035294 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.8971910112 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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