The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
A leader is someone who inspires us and motivates us. Like Obama said "If it has to be, its up to us". A leader unites people, he has the charismatic effect of bringing consensus. Therefore, the statement is agreeable that young people should be taught cooperation instead of competition to generate future leaders.
While, a person should be independent in his thinking and work, it is also important that one absorbs the knowledge its surrounding have to offer. Problems currently are getting complex with passage of every second, thus we cannot expect a single person to solve it. The only solution is "team work"- Where people with expertise in different areas can collaborate to resolve a matter. That is why we need leaders who understand this give and take perspective, who not only listens to people but actually learn their point of view to reach a consensus.
On contrary, it is true that competition brings out the best in a person. For example, a person will apply twice his strength if he is asked to carry a heavy bag alone than in a group. People can slack back in team, and not work to their full capacity. But, one thing to consider is that bag given in example is getting heavier- our problems are getting too complex to be solved by a single person. A competitive person lacks the skills to trust another person and work in a team, to resolve cumbersome problems of current world.
In conclusion, a proficient leader is visionary and is capable of accepting criticism and feedback as devices to improve further and take everyone along while moving forward. To solve current world's tedious problem we need leaders who can efficiently bring out the best in people and believes in his team to reach on common grounds to solve an issue. Therefore, he must posses the quality of cooperation instead of competition.
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 62
- Some people believe that teaching morality should be the foundation of education. Others believe that teaching a foundation of logical reasoning would do more to produce a moral society. 58
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 58
- Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... Like Obama said 'If it has to be, its up to us'. A leader unites people,...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.205555555556 0.240241500013 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.186111111111 0.157235817809 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0805555555556 0.0880659088768 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0527777777778 0.0497285424764 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0583333333333 0.0444667217837 131% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.1 0.12292977631 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0305555555556 0.0406280797675 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71894933146 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.05 0.030933414821 162% => OK
Particles: 0.00833333333333 0.0016655270985 500% => OK
Determiners: 0.075 0.0997080785238 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0222222222222 0.0249443105267 89% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0166666666667 0.0148568991511 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1856.0 2732.02544248 68% => OK
No of words: 316.0 452.878318584 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.87341772152 6.0361032391 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.58838876751 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386075949367 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275316455696 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174050632911 0.200843997647 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113924050633 0.132149295362 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71894933146 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 219.290929204 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572784810127 0.48968727796 117% => OK
Word variations: 62.2841672669 55.4138127331 112% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 19.75 23.380412469 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6201920232 59.4972553346 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 141.124799967 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 23.380412469 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8125 0.674092028746 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 47.2816455696 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.1308411215 1.64882698954 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305472724001 0.391690518653 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0848618369506 0.123202303941 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0413776916753 0.077325440228 54% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.499395143869 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0951903402918 0.149214159877 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119320548094 0.161403998019 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044369260333 0.0892212321368 50% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.373462634191 0.385218514788 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0594519686734 0.0692045440612 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208565838005 0.275328986314 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328659737175 0.0653680567796 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.