Since the existence of the earth many species have prospered in the harmony with other species. For millions of years, prior to the evolution o f humans, flora and fauna, have contributed to each other’s existence. But it was coveting humans, who has devoted to the loss of habitat of other species bringing many of them to the brink of extinction. There is an old adage that “if there were no wilderness, the humans would die in 50 years and if there were no humans, other species would have prospered”. This apothegm elucidates the reality of today's world.
In my opinion, there is no other contributor than humans for the plight of endangered species. Although there have been several species going extinct prior to human evolution but extant fossils suggest that those extinctions were caused by the drastic changes in the ecology of the earth by itself. No evidence has been found to claim that one species superiority lead to the extinction of others. In modern era of industrialization, plethora of studies have concluded that other species have paid the price of human growth. Consider for example, owing to the increasing population, the demand for food has increased several folds over last few decades. The price of this shortfall in food is being paid by the marine species specially by Blue Tuna fish. Due to over-fishing in the Atlantic and Pacific Ocean, biologists quantify, that the number of fishes has plummet by 80% over last two decades. This drastic change has not only threatened the Blue Tuna fish but also human’s own survival due to imbalance in the food chain.
In addition to that, human activities, advertently or in advertently, contribute to loss of habitat of other species. Building dams, to meet the growing needs of human’s, is another good example of their role in disturbing ecological balance. Beavers, once flourished all across over African continent. They play a vital role in maintaining the ecological balance by creating But since almost most of the water is stored in dams for electricity production, beavers lost their habitat as rivers dry up. The dried rivers not only threatened the very survival of Beavers but the fish, which grow in the dams and canals built by Beavers, have also gone extinct.
In conclusion, directly or indirectly, humans have devoted to the cause of many other pieces and pristine wilderness. The rising temperatures of oceans, due to global warming, has also proved detrimental to aquatic life. So, if we humans don’t take the right step to protect endangered wildlife, we will be doomed all to soon.
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- “Laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places” 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since the existence of the earth many species...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05555555556 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79457498529 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4755688123 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143024949869 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042985430419 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306574589857 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810728095041 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337281785675 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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