Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented
Since when we are little, other people ask us what profession we would like to do. There is always some pressure from outside making us think about regular professions, or professions which has a good salary and status. But, I believe that we should choose a profession which holds our personal wishes instead of only consider the availability of jobs and status. I will explain why college student should choose their field of study priorising their talents and interesting for two reasons.
Firstly, the work market is unstable. So, the job which is the trend and most available now, in a few year it could decrease availability or even break down. For example, around 2011 Brazil had a boom in engineering find. The Brazil's economy was growing up and , as result, engineers from most of fields were needed to build factories, power plans, buildings, and work in a lot of fields. By that year, it had a big pressure to college students choose engineering as major because they would have good job offer. But, around six-year later, Brazil economy started to go down, and a lot of college students which choose engineering as major by that time did not find job. This example demonstrates how the market is unstable, and if a college student choose a major thinking about today's trend, when he or she graduate maybe the job will not be a available or hard no get. That's why it's better choose a field of study based on personal interests and talents.
Moreover, even if the marked were stable, the person who choose a field that does not like may will have psychological issues that will affect how well the person works. For example, if a person who likes to sing choose business, she can be so frustrated she can develop anxiety or depression, this issues will not let her work as well as another person who does not have this issues. In other hand, if she had chosen to be a singer, she probable would successes because she would be happier, as consequence she would be able to do a better work. There is researches discussing about how mood and psychological issus can affect our productivity at work. This case show us what can happen if a college student does not follow his or her own drive, that's why it's better to choose a study field which supports her or his own interests.
Some people would argue that it's better to choose a major by the market availability because some profession are hard to find a job and get money, job related with arts field for example. But, choose a trend career it's not guarantee that the person will find a job after graduation any way because the market is unstable as the history shows us, and the person need to feel satisfied to have a good development at work. finally, it's better to choose a profession by the personal interests because it's the way most which the person is most likely to successes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'few years'.
Suggestion: few years
... the trend and most available now, in a few year it could decrease availability or even ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... The Brazils economy was growing up and , as result, engineers from most of field...
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Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the fields') or simply say ''most fields''.
Suggestion: most of the fields; most fields
...wing up and , as result, engineers from most of fields were needed to build factories, power p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
...big pressure to college students choose engineering as major because they would have good j...
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Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
... a lot of college students which choose engineering as major by that time did not find job....
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Line 3, column 845, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... she graduate maybe the job will not be a available or hard no get. Thats why its...
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Line 3, column 873, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...will not be a available or hard no get. Thats why its better choose a field of study ...
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Line 5, column 548, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'There are researches'?
Suggestion: There are researches
... she would be able to do a better work. There is researches discussing about how mood and psycholog...
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Line 5, column 748, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...t does not follow his or her own drive, thats why its better to choose a study field ...
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Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...for example. But, choose a trend career its not guarantee that the person will find...
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Line 7, column 421, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Finally
...ied to have a good development at work. finally, its better to choose a profession by t...
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Line 7, column 498, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ssion by the personal interests because its the way most which the person is most l...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64031620553 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50242151709 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1113785186 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.4 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283963011335 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928858733304 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100401585791 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188710441867 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101501148669 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.