The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people
Nation is a group of people who are governed by the common leader. So, welfare of all the people in the nation should be a good yard stick to measure the greatness of the nation. The statement here asserts that the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by general welfare of its people. I strongly disagree with this statement for the reasons discussed below.
Firstly, having a rich and prosperous artists, rulers, or scientist doesn't essentially mean that all the people in the nation are successful. These rulers may have rose to new hieghts of prosperousness because of rampant corruption in the nation by them. This rampant corruption will have a huge effect on the lives of common people in the nation. For instance, let us say that government started a new scheme in the health sector to lift up the health of all the people in the nation. If the leaders in the health sector are corrupted and collude with hospitals to make themselves rich then the benifits of this scheme started by government would never reach the end users which will result in failure of a health scheme. Thus, this example illustrates that even though the rulers got rich it may not have postive effect on the lives of the common people. Also, these rulers being rich doesn't essentially mean that all the people in the nation are rich.
Secondly, any nation having great scientits and inventions also doesn't essentially mean that the entire nation is great. Only when the inventions from this scientists are put into practice and made useful to people then these inventions would be of use. If the government couldn't make these inventions useful to people because of lack of funds then these inventions would of no use general people. Also these scientists may fly away to rich nation where they can make their inventions can be made useful to general welfare people. For instance, there is an Alpha country which has a lot of great scientists. These scientists have invented a new method of producing electricity in cost effective way. Even though method is cost efficient the government doesn't have enough funds to put this into use and provide electricity to all the people in the nation which can uplift the general welfare of all the people in the nation. These scientists would definitely get frustrated as their inventions are of no use in that nation. Thus, the above example clearly illustrates that having great scientists and inventions doesn't essentially make nation great until and unless these inventions are put into use to uplift the general welfare of people.
Some may argue there are some nations in which both people and scientists, artists, rulers are rich. Is this correlation true in each and every country? It may be true for some rich nations like United states but may not be true for all the nations in the world. Thus it is clear from the above reasons that having great achievements from rulers, artists doesn't essentially to general welfare of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 520.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87692307692 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53554319426 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.365384615385 0.4932671777 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 772.2 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5332485974 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.666666667 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326062413466 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104341977024 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103866279012 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22702603806 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125539697972 0.0667264976115 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.