The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart compares the percentage of males and females who held different levels of academic qualifications in Australia in 1999.

We can see immediately that there were substantial differences in the proportion of men and women at different levels. The biggest gender difference is at the lowest post-school level, where 90% of those who held a skilled vocational diploma were men, compared with only 10% of women. By contrast, more women held undergraduate diplomas (70%) and marginally more women reached degree level (55%).

At the higher levels of education, men with postgraduate diplomas clearly outnumbered their female counterparts ( 70% and 30%, respectively), and also constituted 60% of Master’s graduates.

Thus we can see that more men than women held qualifications at the lower and higher levels of education, while more women reach undergraduate diploma level than men. The gap between sexes is smallest at the level of Bachelor’s degree, however.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 150.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51333333333 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2029500291 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.85685828 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.142857143 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280583997491 0.215688989381 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144149887974 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858586199709 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182977849726 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0952534999847 0.0819641961636 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.2329268293 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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