The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the proportion of males and females in Australia obtained in 5 different post-school qualifications in 1999.
Overall, while the proportions of males' certificates were massively high in skilled vocational diploma, postgraduate diploma and master's degree, females only majored in getting undergraduate diploma and bachelor's degree.
In the chart, the percentage of males achieved skilled vocational diploma was 10 times bigger than those of females. Similarly, in both postgraduate diploma and master's degree, men's certificates tended to outweigh women's ones. About 70% of males postgraduate diploma was gained in 1999 while only 30% was made in females. In master's degree, the difference between two figures was 20%. It is noticeable that men had paid more attention in studying for master's degree than women. However, females mainly focused on getting undergraduate diplomas and bachelor's degree. About 72% of Australia women obtained undergraduate diplomas while only 38% from those of men. In bachelor's degree, a small gap of approximately 5% was made between two genders.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...postgraduate diploma and masters degree, females only majored in getting undergra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, similarly, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67878787879 4.92477711251 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06090007589 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569696969697 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4657690149 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125139393921 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065820050525 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083026694108 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136792263469 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121635949744 0.0819641961636 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 61.2550243902 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 11.4140731707 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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