The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

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The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995.

Given are two pie charts revealing the diversity of the adults’ favorite recreations in Europe in the period from 1985 to 1995.

After 10 years passed, the proportions of the spare-time activities the adults preferred varied considerably. All the original entertainments still existed in 1995. However, the percentage of most entertainments declined respectively; except talking with friends slightly went up. Meanwhile, a new recreation-Playing computer games appeared in 1995, took a part of the share of the grown-ups’ favorite leisure activities.

Most of proportions of leisure activities in Europe had a downward trend between 1985 and 1995, except talking with friends and playing computer games. 18% of adults always talked with friends in spare time, and the number jumped to 26% ten years later. No one chose Playing Computer Games in 1985, but suddenly 27% of grownups found it the most amusing pastime.

On the other hands, the adults adored to watch TV the most for ten years, but the proportion slightly decreased from 32% to 30%. Eating Out, Talking with Family and Other remarkably fell from 23% to 8%, 18% to 7% and 6% to 2 %, respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are two pie charts revealing the diversity ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the proportions') or simply say ''Most proportions''.
Suggestion: Most of the proportions; Most proportions
...' favorite leisure activities. Most of proportions of leisure activities in Europe had a d...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: To play
...ed to 26% ten years later. No one chose Playing Computer Games in 1985, but suddenly 27...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ps found it the most amusing pastime. On the other hands, the adults adored to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, still, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26595744681 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07569009241 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606382978723 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8118189983 43.030603864 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161709237412 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656202146717 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066710604917 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113537864961 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763131188937 0.0819641961636 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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