The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart shows the main factors of land degradation worldwide during the 1990s and the table gives information about it in the three different regions.
Overall, the four main causes of the land degradation : Over-grazing, deforestation, over-cultivation, and others. Overg-grazing and deforestation are the two top factors which contributed around 65%. europe and oceania are the most degraded countries which accounted for 23% and 13% respectively.
In north america, the total land degraded mostly caused by over-cultivation with the percentage number around 3.3%. it was followed by over-grazing as the second primary factor contributing to 1.5% of the land degradation. In total, the causes was constituting around 5% of the total land degraded. different with the north america, europe is the most country affected by the four factors contributing to 23% of the total land degradation. While in europe, Over-cultivation was the second top factor constituting 7.7% of the land degradation, In oceania, it did not contribute to the land degradation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 902.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56790123457 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.46296059056 2.65546596893 130% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530864197531 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5700352394 43.030603864 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.222222222 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 1.13902439024 702% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153831989037 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745876333017 0.103423049105 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991373790022 0.0843802449381 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156597051183 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131414354455 0.0819641961636 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 61.2550243902 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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