The table below gives information about student enrolment at Bristol University in 1928 1958 and 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The table below gives information about student enrolment at Bristol University in 1928, 1958, and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by dorae on Sat, 11/11/2023 - 23:12

The table illustrates how many students registered at Bristol University in three different years of 1928, 1958 and 2008.
Overall, the total number of students surged year on year significantly, while the number of female students made up less students than their counterparts from 1928 to 1958. However, they exceeded those of male at the end of period. The proportion of local students and males dropped. In addition, the percentage of oversea students also increased sharply over the period.
In 1928, there was a small number of student enrollments, only 218 students, however in 1958, the figure of students increased by around 5 times and around 6 times in 2008. Meanwhile, males with almost three-fifths (58%) in 1928 witnessed a sharp shrink to 46% in 2008, compared to those of female students, increasing from 42% in 1928 to 54% in 2008.
Furthermore local students accounted exactly a half (50%), before experiencing a sharp increase by 14% in 1958 and 1-2% in 2008. Turning to the figure for overseas students, they remained at fairly lower totals at 5% and 6% in 1928 and 1958 respectively, however, they reached close to a third (28%) in 2008.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun students is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e the number of female students made up less students than their counterparts from 1...
^^^^
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...ly over the period. In 1928, there was a small number of student enrollments, only 218 students,...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...asing from 42% in 1928 to 54% in 2008. Furthermore local students accounted exactly a half...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, third, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9587628866 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78711106641 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572164948454 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5518686625 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.888888889 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220891704651 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985229164981 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657052194564 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16179388078 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608419056867 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun students is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e the number of female students made up less students than their counterparts from 1...
^^^^
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...ly over the period. In 1928, there was a small number of student enrollments, only 218 students,...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...asing from 42% in 1928 to 54% in 2008. Furthermore local students accounted exactly a half...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, third, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9587628866 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78711106641 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572164948454 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5518686625 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.888888889 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220891704651 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985229164981 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657052194564 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16179388078 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608419056867 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.