The news company is going to start a new program on TV about a particular place Write a letter to offer your suggestions on what the program should be like In your letter you should tell how you know about that place what suggestions you would like to mak

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in regards to the opening of a new program on your news channel. I was overwhelmed to hear about this program which will show the beautiful views of the Himalayas.

I completed my graduation in computer science engineering from Shimla which is the capital of Himachal in the Himalayas of India. This state has a pleasant atmosphere in summers and extremely cold weather in winters.

I would suggest you explore the valleys in the mountains of the Himalayas. Most of them are located near my college. Besides, some of them are still not covered by the media channels. I will be sending you the list if you would require it while exploring the new valleys of the Himalayas.

These unexplored locations have astonishing environmental changes along with different kinds of weed plants. Every valley in these mountains has a history that can be learned from the locals living near those valleys. Moreover, it would be best to communicate with private automobiles like cars because these areas have fewer public transports vehicles.

I am hoping that you would like my suggestion in exploring the hidden places of the Himalayas.
Yours faithfully,
Shwatank Bhasin

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Sir I am writing this letter in regards to the opening of a new program on your ne...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nd extremely cold weather in winters I would suggest you explore the valleys i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 997.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01005025126 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65954981568 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618090452261 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 199.0 16.3608247423 1216% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 997.0 76.5299724578 1303% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 199.0 16.8248392259 1183% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 39.0 4.34317383033 898% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242156532159 0.216113520407 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242156532159 0.0766984524023 316% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1306129818 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933318075505 0.0580467560999 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 101.7 8.37731958763 1214% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -122.05 70.7449484536 -173% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 79.7 7.45979381443 1068% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 8.71597938144 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 17.47 7.59969072165 230% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 8.62886597938 626% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 81.6 8.54432989691 955% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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