Your child is going on a school trip, overseas for 3 days. The headmaster is looking for parents to join the trip. Write a letter to state that you would like to join it. Mention:Why you would like to join the tripHow you can be helpful to others Ask some

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Your child is going on a school trip, overseas for 3 days. The headmaster is looking for parents to join the trip. Write a letter to state that you would like to join it. Mention:
Why you would like to join the trip
How you can be helpful to others
Ask some general questions on the trip

I am writing this letter to you in regards to the next month's school trip to Cairo. I would like to register for this trip.
I have been working as a tourist guide since 2016, so I have been to many cities, and I had visited Cairo twice last year. In turn, I have enough experience to guide the pupils. Moreover, I am pretty trained to give them a historical tour of the monuments.
In addition to this, I am a certified basic life support rescuer, which is vital for any emergency during the journey. So I hope my request will be accepted and I would appreciate if you provide me with a few details about the excursion. I want to know if there are any additional charges for parents. Also, the accommodation and meals if it will be provided to parents or not.
Looking forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

Yours faithfully,
Yousef

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
I am writing this letter to you in regards to the next months school trip to Cairo. I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...would like to register for this trip. I have been working as a tourist guide si...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 693.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 156.0 206.0 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44230769231 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56476754198 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 127.690721649 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.673076923077 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 290.88556701 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.463740117 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.0 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1818181818 16.8248392259 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222109375298 0.216113520407 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819327339771 0.0766984524023 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879262410979 0.0603063233224 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138308846965 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113509043675 0.0580467560999 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 8.37731958763 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.88 8.71597938144 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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