With the ageing of society, we are now beginning to see a growing interest in further abolishment retirement. Do you think that mandatory retirement is obsolete or should sustained ?
In the recent years, ageing population has never ceased draw public attention and provoke debates. Albeit, popular throughout the world, the issue as to whether government should lift or maintain remain controversial. I am supportive to the government should make modification.
Firstly, it its important to recognize that the old's health nowadays are so decent that many of them are active, productive member of society. Needless to say, the elderly have good health conditions because they have easily access to advance medical services, nutrition daily diet that will help them maintain their health conditions. For example, in Japan, authorities of this country has expanded the working age of citizen because citizen's life-expectancy in this country has increased significantly. The old are having longer longevity who have reached the age of 65 and beyond can continue their employments. This example shows that the government should abolish compulsory retirement policy due to good health conditions of seniors at present time.
Secondly, another benefit from abolishing mandatory retirement policy is consistency of macro-economic performance. Many may argue that the old are disqualified to working in organizations. This argument is true to some extent. However, they should take into account that fact that the elderly possess the wealth of working experience, skills, hands-on, know how and rule-of-thumps. For example, it come to jobs of administration, Younger hardly replace satisfying substitutions to the old who are valued for flexibility, professional etiquette, good communication. This example indicates that if countries are having trouble low fertility rate, young labour shortage should enable the old continue their jobs in order to constitute a major workforce.
In conclusion, under no circumstances should people underestimate the elderly because their good physical conditions and their valuable knowledge which are hardly to have at Younger as mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...popular throughout the world, the issue as to whether government should lift or maintain rema...
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Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'olds'' or 'old's'?
Suggestion: olds'; old's
... it its important to recognize that the olds health nowadays are so decent that many...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'accessed'.
Suggestion: accessed
...lth conditions because they have easily access to advance medical services, nutrition ...
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Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: Much may; A good deal of may
...sistency of macro-economic performance. Many may argue that the old are disqualified to ...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...how and rule-of-thumps. For example, it come to jobs of administration, Younger hard...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75675675676 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12799162865 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614864864865 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7276330456 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.6 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0895721523866 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315844998055 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303871151846 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0524402055924 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169339530272 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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