Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. What are the causes of this ? What solutions can be offered ?

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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. What are the causes of this ? What solutions can be offered ?

In some parts of the world, the obesity rate in children has increased considerably. In my opinion, unhealthy eating habits and the lack of doing exercise are the two main reasons of this. In this essay, I will illustrates some negative impacts and some possible measures that should be taken to address the problems.
To begin with, eating junk food is considered one of the primary causes leading to the increase in childhood obesity. Many kids now prefer processed food such as hamburgers, chips, soft drink to food which is rich in fiber and vitamins. secondly, more and more young people spend less time working out to improve their health. take my brother, for example, he glues his eyes on the computer's screen all day but not doing any physical exercise as he thinks he will lose his energy if he activates.
As a result, these habits may lead to enormous health problems in children. For one, they may be unhealthy and unfit when consuming a large amount of fat and calories in junk food. Another further pressure will include a higher risk of other serious diseases like diabetes, heart disease, and cancer which may make them be a burden on hospitals in the future.
There are several steps that could be taken by parents, schools, and government to solves this problem. Firstly, the government should limit junk food advertising on TV and wherever kids can see it. secondly, parents and schools should make sure that kids have a healthy diet at home and school. Last but not least, children need to be encouraged to take more regular exercise and play more sports.
To sum up, bad eating habits and lack of exercise are the main reasons that make children obese. As a result, the downside would emerge consequently in terms of being unhealthy and the possibility of getting some ailments. Nevertheless, the problems may be caused if children follow the help of parents and schools as well as government.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8303030303 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.502112973 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.4955437919 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.7647058824 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1176470588 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135226706387 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042712427587 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035833094403 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726564509234 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01661114746 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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