Government investment in the arts , such as music and painting is the waste of money government must invest this money in public services instead .

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Government investment in the arts , such as music and painting is the waste of money government must invest this money in public services instead .

One of the most debatable issue today relates to administrative spend much money on the music and theatre while other argue that is it much better for government to spend money on other development. I am going to discuss the aformentioned views in the upcoming paragraphs.
On one side of the argument that people who argue that the invest on art is a wastage of money considerably outweigh it's disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that People who idea it is a negative aspect have their own justification because majority of people tend to be a lack of awareness , they have not knowledge about arts, it is the part of our culture and tradition. For instance, in India Maharaja Ranjit Singh museum the paintings depict the our background and our culture. As well as music show our language.
However, a definite actions could be taken to mitigate of obviously art and music is necessary, but spend money on education is tend to be reduced the econical burdan on parents. As a consequence, every student achieve education as they tend to be belong poor or rich. Because today's era majority of the people's are deprived for higher education. On the another hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case children learn the knowledge about other culture and tradition, but some time people have no food such as, house or food provide the jobs ,and finish illetracy is best method of investment instead of arts.
To conclusions, although there are good reasons for believing but I am agree with this statement because there are lack of space for government to spend money like, hospital and school , it is important as compared to arts I believe that education is more effective method that should be adopted by government which help it grow to strong adult.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 56, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...the argument that people who argue that the invest on art is a wastage of money considerab...
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Line 2, column 305, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...of people tend to be a lack of awareness , they have not knowledge about arts, it ...
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Line 2, column 462, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'our'?
Suggestion: the; our
...anjit Singh museum the paintings depict the our background and our culture. As well as ...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'action'?
Suggestion: action
...show our language. However, a definite actions could be taken to mitigate of obviously...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...essary, but spend money on education is tend to be reduced the econical burdan on pa...
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Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... such as, house or food provide the jobs ,and finish illetracy is best method of i...
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Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... provide the jobs ,and finish illetracy is best method of investment instead of arts. ...
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Line 4, column 72, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...are good reasons for believing but I am agree with this statement because there are l...
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Line 4, column 185, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...to spend money like, hospital and school , it is important as compared to arts I b...
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Line 4, column 325, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'grows'?
Suggestion: grows
... be adopted by government which help it grow to strong adult. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89215686275 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71404297367 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.1536542804 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.090909091 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8181818182 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222649693171 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695309472308 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644932275227 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129313197284 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195222936104 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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