Governments investment on arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
While arts such as music and theatre can bring out tremendous benefits for the society, people who advocate for materialistic may argue that the resources channeled into these artistic forms by government is a waste of public money and we should use these money to invest in other services instead. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this statement.
Firstly, arts can be used as tools for authority to control and adjust citizens’mindsets in such an efficiency way that the need of public services may no longer be necessary. The world of arts contains many kinds of platform and each of these can leave certain impact on individuals who received them. A prevalent example of this is propaganda. They are vivid illustrations with powerful words to announce special days or raise dweller’s awareness of whether the culprit of cigarets or the importance of wearing helmets when we are on the road. By seeing these pictures day by day, we will fully aware of what we should do to protect ourselves from diseases or avoidable transport accidents. Hence, the improvement in hospital is not a burden anymore as the rate of patients decrease gradually.
Secondly, investing in arts is actually a business for enormous profit in return. Music and theatre have become indispensable parts in lives of human beings for centuries due the richness of cultural identities as well as the power to connect people.Thus, supporting potential artists or label companies with certain amount of money at the beginning may eventually brings out much more money under the form of taxes.An example is “Ca trù” , a Vietnamese genre of musical storytelling performed by featuring female vocalists, with origins in northern Viet Nam had received 100 millions Viet Nam dong financial support for maintenance and improvement. Later on, it has contributed to the rapid growth of economy in its region thanks to tourist attraction and helped the government to get back billions within a few years.
In conclusion, the investing of governments in arts is crucial not only for mental but also for economical aspects
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22740524781 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01142446785 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644314868805 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.182933181 49.4020404114 282% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.416666667 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5833333333 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1666666667 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200737805761 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621113570995 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683386194086 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133935928559 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779225089166 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.