It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and
their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, with a 21st century life we two view on how people life. With a group of people, they think we need to take risk to get successful both in career lives or in daily lives. And with another group, they think just live with a peaceful life because take risk so dangerous for their career lives and their personal lives.
On the one hand, if you are a person who want to make a large thing you need to take risks because it will be make a chance for you to be successful. For example, is Elon Musk when he founded Tesla everyone think he is crazy because electric car at this time were still in an early stage of development, but Elon Musk just continues to develop Tesla and today he is the richest person in the world. Or just in a personal lives, you have crush a girl but you scare she will ghosting you and you don’t tell to her, you never can make a new step with her. So we need an achievement you want to reach, people will make all the efforts to think about it and find an effective way to reach it. Also, it will be meaningful if you failed to achieve the goal after taking risks. Because you will learn a lesson why you have failed and try to find more efficient ways to achieve a goal.
On the other hand, taking risk will be made a great impact if people do it and fail. In personal life this loss might not to be harmful, but in professional life it is a another story because people take responsibility not only for themselves but also others such as customers, colleagues and their families.
In conclusion, taking risks give us both advantages and disadvantages. But we can’t disagree that taking risk is the only ways to get people successful not only in personal lives but also in professional lives
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 473, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'ghost'
Suggestion: ghost
...ave crush a girl but you scare she will ghosting you and you don’t tell to her, you neve...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...harmful, but in professional life it is a another story because people take respo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.32208588957 5.12529762239 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36548418941 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48773006135 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.3015314455 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.384615385 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318926734414 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13207749617 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853051599923 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226998806058 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646368791697 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 12.4159519038 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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