It is impossible to help all people in the world so governments should only focus on people in their own countries To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is often considered that government is not in a situation to lend a hand to people from other countries, so government should concentrate on it's own public. In my opinion I disagree with this point of looking into people who belong to their respective nation.

Firstly, the administration should not focus on it's own people because there will be a lot of individuals who come from other nations and take part in some other country. If the administration keep on having eye on persons of own nation then it will be a major drawback of the government and it will result in the withdraw of other countries citizens from the nation. In turn it causes revenue loss and economy of the place will be reduced by some amount. For example think like stopping importing of certain goods from other nations and it results in a huge disadvantage for the country itself, it will be same scenario. So it is better to treat everyone equally and retain respect for the country.

secondly, it helps the government to develop friendship with the other nations as well so that their understanding develops. If there is understanding between many nations then we could possibly create peace with the nations and eradicate war. So in order to attain this idea the government should not only focus on one's people . Example some nations in the world are liked by every other nation so that they would not be a direct target if something bad happens, that kind of peace should be in between every country. So the first step towards that direction is taking care of personals from other nations equally.

To conclude, I strongly believe that focusing on people from other countries rather than concentrating on one's own people is great motive cause it develops friendship between nations and improve the countries conditions as well.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84887459807 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66799153479 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501607717042 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1861478019 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235310969793 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101715091747 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879852648251 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177700688036 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552820416954 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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