In many countries, government spent a large amount of money on improving internet access. Why is it happening and do you think it is the most appropriate use of government money?

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In many countries, government spent a large amount of money on improving internet access. Why is it happening and do you think it is the most appropriate use of government money?

All over the world, the question of how the governments should allocate their national budget often attracts a lot of public attention. Although nowadays there has been a trend on investing money in the global international network, this does not appear a proper way of spending.

There are a number of reasons why governments, especially those in developed countries, channel significant amounts of budget into improving internet access. First, since citizens in those countries are more likely to lead a life of good quality, they tend to demand improvements on recreational activities which include surfing the Internet as one of the most popular pastimes in the modern world. In fact, the faster internet speed is, the more satisfied residents become, thus the governments are just doing their job by putting more into providing better internet connections. Second, not only does it meet the demand of citizens but faster internet also leaves good impressions on foreign tourists. For example, South Korea, Hong Kong and Japan topping the list of fastest connection speeds in the world has appealed millions of visitors every year, which also brings benefit to those countries.

Nevertheless, it is more efficient to spend that substantial amount of state budget on other fields of life. first, regardless of satisfying people's leisure need, upgrading the Internet does not seem to have any remarkable impacts on the society, compared to just maintaining the Internet at an acceptable speed. this means that improving network systems to offer better connections is great but not necessarily the most appropriate aim for using government money. Furthermore, the authorities should pay more attention and investment to the crucial aspects of social life such as education, environment and welfare. The Internet, in the end, is nothing more than a means of contemporary days which should not come first when the core issues have not been fully tackled.

In conclusion, despite the fact that faster access of the Internet does bring lots of pleasure for people in their recreational life, it should not be the focus in distributing national expenditure. governments would better place an emphasis on solving important issues rather than upgrade less essential utilities like the Internet.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3729281768 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82411922556 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613259668508 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.3426377173 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.928571429 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220285356493 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071850768214 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671571199171 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120650770642 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345201705833 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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