In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
Write at least 250 words.
considering the term overweight nowadays,myriad children who are suffering from this problem in many countries.This thing happen because increasing the fast food outlets and irresponsibility of parents. to overcome this cause kids should balance their diet properly and parents ought to look after their children.
By observing this problem closely,there are two main causes for overweight children.Firstly,the number of junk food restaurants significantly increase day by day, which has directly or indirectly impact on children eating habit.in other words ,they have influenced by convenience food due to it has contains with cheese and many other ingredients also they offer huge discount. since over the year the number of fast food franchisee namely, MacDonald,Burger king gradually surge in many industrialize nations ,they attract mainly infants to give enormous offers about ready-made food which contain too much fat and oil.Thus,infants has addicted by this type of food. Secondly,patents should also responsible for this issue.That means,working parents do not look after their infant well-being :what they eat and they do exercise or not.That is why , their children habitual towards awful aspects such as they seat in front of TV not play outdoor games then they mostly prefer to eat pre-cook food which has not preferable for their health, they cause from obesity.So,these circumstances are causing a over-weighting problem especially, in children.
Turing to possible solutions,most effective measure is children can balance their diet which has contains more nutrients. That is to say, they have prefer to eat home-made food than street food.Therefore,they can not only beneficial for build their muscle but also keep stay healthy.tack an example, recent survey conducted by WHO homemade food contain better vitamins,carbohydrate which has led to positive impact on health.Another possible solution is parents should also take care of their children by doing exercise with them and teach them positive and negative effect of eating fast food. Consequently,they at least avoid eating to high saturated fat food and manage their own diet plans according to suggestion of his parents.
On concluding remark,although in my opinion,escalating fast food outlets and lack of responsibility of parents, there are two main reasons for overweight the children. possible approaches are infants must balancing their eating diet and parents focus on their toddler health.If particular country cannot tackle this problem seriously, then it would alarming for upcoming generation.
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also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, at least, such as, in my opinion, in other words, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72727272727 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43247433355 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581818181818 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
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Sentence length: 38.0 20.2975951904 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.119946317 49.4020404114 271% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 220.5 106.682146367 207% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 38.5 20.7667163134 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.6 7.06120827912 235% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.01903807615 737% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150333607279 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682703635422 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222749702145 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974569652176 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297884477408 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.8 13.0946893788 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.45 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.3001002004 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.55 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.1190380762 170% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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