Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh its disadvantages?
The option of rearing children domestically instead of entrusting child care responsibility to educational institutions has been widely adopted by parents. Notwithstanding the merits that kids derive from familial bonds, I believe it is overshadowed by that of the other / profound downsides of this approach.
For one thing, kids who are educated under the supervision and guidance of their relatives are likely to shoulder the future career that the previous generations have developed. Parents who decide to let their offspring study at home often engage in part-time jobs, work remotely or be self-employed, in order to provide full-time instruction for their offspring. In such conditions, children will perceive experience and are more inclined to be led in the way in which their parents have embarked. This individual-based teaching method is considerably advantageous and significant for those who are going to inherit traditional domestic property, which is the career path that passed down within generations merely. As a result, they will acquire a good grasp of conducting family business autonomously through personalized training programmes.
For another, I believe that there are subtle disadvantages of this child-rearing approach, leading to deficiency of skills and lack of competency for children. One thing considered, the environment that parents provide for their kids is deemed a form of safety zone, in which they are allowed to progress at their own pace and avoid risks from failure. However, this would result in inferior competency, given the absence of opportunities to put more effort in the training process in order to catch up with peers and had they been familiar with the personalized curriculum, complying with the general programmes pose a challenging task to their learning abilities and adaptation in the future. Additionally, there are unique skills which parents are incapable of monitoring and adjusting during the learning process of their children such as teamwork skills or debate in front of the crowd. In this fierce society, these two primary features are important for those who seek rewarding jobs and kids who are incapable of performing these skills will lose competitive edge to others.
To conclude, the option to raise children in a domestic environment is not effective in the abstract. The drawbacks of this trend undoubtedly outweigh the merits of it.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, such as, as a result, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.456 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09450146858 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.26173357 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.142857143 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7857142857 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144086990117 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503293497934 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386563832869 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0846959561843 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244326012364 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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