In many parts of the world, some famous people are considered as ‘role models’ and they are having an increasing influence on the young. Is this a positive or negative development?
The tendency to regard celebrities as exemplary figures has gained increasing prominence, having various profound effects on young minds worldwide. This essay will evaluate the merits and drawbacks of this trend before determining whether it is beneficial or detrimental to our society.
On the one hand, one compelling reason to look up to prominent figures as role models for young people is that they offer exposure to new ideas . Specifically, well-known people often have unique opportunities to travel to different parts of the world, significantly broadening their understanding of distinctive cultural values and technological advancements. This information is often disseminated via social media platforms by popular individuals, prompting young individuals to remain abreast of the latest developments and innovations. For instance, Ngo Bao Chau, a famous Vietnamese professor, has inspired many young Vietnamese geniuses to pursue scientific research. Consequently, these young talents may contribute to Vietnam’s sustainable development if they can devise innovative scientific devices to benefit the population.
Nevertheless, some celebrities may serve as poor examples for young people, adversely shaping their conduct and outlook. The financial incentives of viral videos on social media have led some famous singers to become content creators, creating entertaining content with visually captivating elements. However, these videos may not undergo thorough scrutiny by government agencies before being publicized, potentially disseminating misinformation and violent content. Consequently, regular exposure to this content may lead adolescents and younger children to emulate violent behaviors in real-life situations if they feel dissatisfied or angry due to arguments with their friends.
In conclusion, while some celebrities are significantly contributing to the sustainability and prosperity of their nations, I believe that fame is exerting detrimental effects on the overall development of young people. This is because children may be affected by videos containing violent content and misinformation, which distorts their understanding and hinders their development.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.2131147541 5.12529762239 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35831501225 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649180327869 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0182233133 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.769230769 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246684125757 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762443470927 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357657125856 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13243296848 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695537559923 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.03 12.4159519038 153% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.25 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... figures as role models for young people is that they offer exposure to new ideas...
^^
Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...is that they offer exposure to new ideas . Specifically, well-known people often h...
^^
Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... travel to different parts of the world, significantly broadening their understan...
^^
Line 2, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ues and technological advancements. This information is often disseminated via so...
^^
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...videos may not undergo thorough scrutiny by government agencies before being publ...
^^
Line 4, column 125, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...bility and prosperity of their nations, I believe that fame is exerting detriment...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.2131147541 5.12529762239 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35831501225 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649180327869 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0182233133 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.769230769 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246684125757 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762443470927 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357657125856 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13243296848 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695537559923 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 19.03 12.4159519038 153% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.25 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.