Many people put their personal information online (address,
telephone number,...) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks
or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
In this day and age, a large number of people reveal their personal information and their daily activities on social media sites. From my perspective, I agree that this pattern of behaviour has a negative impact on individuals.
On the one hand, individuals who put their information on the internet are likely to prove who they are and to support their friends who are in need of help. Firstly, people whose information is put online are able to make good impression on recruiters and interviewers. For example, as their profiles and resumes on popular job-seeking websites, namely linkedin, boxvn are often linked with their facebook accounts, it is beneficial for these people if their achievements are shown clearly. As a result, recruiters find it easier to contact and work with them. Secondly, people could help their friends in case of emergency. Indeed, putting personal information online may help their friends and acquaintances to find your phone number and to contact you when they have issues.
On the other hand, i believe that the act of exposing too much private information to the public have for more disadvantages for various reasons. First of all, people are prone to being the targeted victims of internet-based crimes. For example, many internet-based criminals create fake accounts to grope fifteen-year-old girls, which are despicable, and make use of personal information of these little girls so as to harrass them. In fact, savvy hackers or hightech criminals can easily steal bank accounts and trick people into giving them money. Secondly, by revealing private activities on the internet, people are vulnerable to cyberbullies. Because the internet offers countless bullies a shield of aninomity, they feel safe to spew negativity and attack a lot of victims without receiving the repercussions as these bullying activities were to happen in the real world.
In conclusion, although the idea of putting personal activities on social networks offers some potential benefits, I concur with the argument that this pattern of behaviour is seen as a negative development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
In this day and age, a large number of people reveal their personal informatio...
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Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n they have issues. On the other hand, i believe that the act of exposing too mu...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...sonal information of these little girls so as to harrass them. In fact, savvy hackers or...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27462686567 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96090814701 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558208955224 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8542650439 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.8 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310978711932 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940149447386 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067735815462 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182730327411 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349763686144 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.