In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

The rapid advancement of technology has changed the way the world operates. A computer connected to the internet is now adequate for an enormous number of activities such as online trading and live communicating. Despite some inevitable drawbacks, I am convinced that the development of the internet is essential for humankind.

On the one hand, e-commerce, which means the activity of buying or selling of products on online services or over the Internet, allows people to buy things easily in their home at any time at day or night. Besides, it is extremely convenient and less time-consuming when we are able to settle all payments via websites instead of going to the shops or banks to pay money. Furthermore, advanced technologies allow enterprises to carry out teleconferences with their partners all over the world. For instance, a business located in Vietnam can discuss future trading strategies with their co-operators in the US and Japan simultaneously via the Internet, hence save a tremendous amount of time and their budget for business trips.

On the other hand, many people argue about the insecurity of online payments if we lose our passwords or private information, which allows hackers to steal our money. Moreover, the benefits and disadvantages of social networks remain a source of controversy. Young people tend to get engrossed in using Facebook and YouTube that they do not want to communicate directly with others or do outdoor activities. This can cause negative effects for their physical and mental health.

In conclusion, the growth of Internet enhances the benefits of online trading and communicating. This development is obviously positive if we can manage and use the Internet properly.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 730, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27898550725 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0554178331 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615942028986 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8311909245 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.076923077 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2307692308 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181163824927 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597356446777 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041836023294 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107060716061 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145895462418 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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