Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In our contemporary society, children is becoming the target audience of most advertisement. Some individuals opine that this can have a debilitating effect on children and should be prohibited. Personally, although advertising has its positive aspects for children in some cases, I believe that it also has negative sides.
Advertising is attributable to some positive sides for children. First of all, advertisements can serve as an inspiration for children to study about marketing. Since advertisements often possess glamourous appearances or interesing video clips about products on streets and television, this can attract children's attention and they want to make advertisements like those. For instance, children can be attracted by the images or decorations of advertising and they show their interest in learning more about marketing. Moreover, many tutor centres for children advertised on social networking sites such as Youtube, hence, children can find out to go to those centers to learn, which can help them to study better. To exemplify, children can improve their English skills by going to english centres.
However, this trend of advertising can have an adverse impact on children. Since many food and drinks brands collaborate with celebrity to endorse their products such as snack foods or sugary drinks, and due to the big influence of celebrity, children are easily want to purchase those food and drinks, which leads to the obesity of children nowadays. To illustrate, Christiano Ronaldo promotes the newly manufactured drinks which are high in sugary and this drives children to purchase that new drink and overconsume it, which lead to the incrtease in obesity rates in children.
In conclusion, I am of of the opinion that advertising can come in handy for children in some cases, but it also has negative impact on children's health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39931740614 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99725944239 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549488054608 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.339796918 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.692307692 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328800009699 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152679011111 0.084324248473 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745115725626 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23252735602 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548120067613 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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