Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or negative development?
It is obvious that these days people tend to spend more time on several technological devices in their leisure time. While this tendency can possess both negative and positive impacts, I firmly argue that the disadvantages are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, it is incontrovertible that over-reliance on technology can lead to some detrimental consequences for the users. Firstly, this phenomenon can promote sedentary lifestyles, which reduce the available time for regular exercise, consequently making people prone to several health-related problems. For instance, those who are addicted to keeping their eyes glued on the computer screen can not only suffer from obesity but also damage their eyesight. Secondly, fewer people spending their time on outside activities means the feeling of community will be fallen by the wayside. Moreover, ties of kinship among family members can be also less likely to achieve, which can result in several mental problems such as autism.
On the other hand, I believe spending free time on advances in technology can endow numerous benefits that can be more significant than the drawbacks. In terms of education, it is undeniable that nowadays, being computer-literate is regarded as one of the crucial requirements for graduates and employees to gain a competitive edge and enhance their career prospects. Moreover, concentrating on navigating leading-edge technology encourages people, especially youngsters, effectively broaden their knowledge and helps them easily move up to the career ladders. From the societal perspective, thanks to the aid of social networking sites, there are countless opportunities to connect more people with the same interests around the globe. Although this trend may discourage real interaction, communication via webcam is the most convenient way for the inhabitants in urban areas to save more time and money spent on commuting in rush hour traffic jams, in which transportations usually grind to a halt.
In conclusion, I would argue that reliance on technology to fill leisure time possesses more positive than negative aspects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54153846154 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13155499495 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627692307692 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.8231863575 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.538461538 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5384615385 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211397723993 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075536794429 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531710720291 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153159092349 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486397939125 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.22 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.