Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As consumerism is increasingly popular among young generation, there is a concern about adverse outcomes when people use the majority of spare time on shopping in mega malls. Personally, I agree that this trend is harmful, and this essay will explain how harmful it is to the society.
It is agreeable that consumerism does have its good side. For example, it boosts economic growth and generates frequent innovation. However, this lifestyle has detrimental effects which in my opinion outweighed the advantages.
When it comes to finance, consumerism actually does more harm to individuals than good. Firstly, it would raise the debt level to young customer, who usually do not possess a sustainable financial foundation. Take Korea as an example, young employees in this country are overdependent on credit cards; they often purchase transactions that they cannot afford. Therefore, according to some research, Koreans are facing one of the highest individual debt in the history. In addition to economic difficulty, debts would cause mental health problems, such as anxiety disorder or sleep deprivation.
Moreover, excessively spend free time on joyful shopping would lead to negative consequences in the long term. For most people, spare time is spent on sport activities in search of healthy improvement. Others leverage this time to recover productivity. Meanwhile, people who entertain by shopping will face lacks of these developments, therefore work less effectively and also have low-quality health. This outcome contributes to the observable situation among young people nowadays, in which they are likely to have serious health problems earlier than people in the past.
In conclusion, while some advantages are notable, the disadvantages of this trend have more considerable influence to not only health but also financial status of young people. Therefore, I believe excessive purchase for enjoyment is a harmful development to the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56666666667 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98941837524 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626666666667 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9538966365 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2352941176 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278816458139 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717837314123 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644325397911 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137491091471 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853697730759 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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