As the number of people who live in cities continues to increase the number of children who are raised in cities also has increased Some people believe that raising a child in a large city brings many advantages Meanwhile other people claim that it has ma

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As the number of people who live in cities continues to increase, the number of children who are raised in cities also has increased. Some people believe that raising a child in a large city brings many advantages. Meanwhile, other people claim that it has many drawbacks for the development and welfare of children. Discuss both views and provide your opinion.

More and more people from countryside migrated to a large city with a belief that raising their child in this place brings many advantages to the development of a kid. However, the other people claim that it has many drawbacks in the safety of children.

One of the main advantages of raising a child in cities is that it is good for education. First, every child at an appropriate age must go to school, and the vast majority of schools in the city not only have many well-quality teachers but also have the necessary equipment for teaching and studying. In addition, in some big cities, it also attracts the foreigner, which will bring the opportunity for a child to meet the multicultural. This diversity is an important factor for growing a kid mentally. Another advantage is that there are many different kinds of outside activities for kids to do in their free time. For example, they may choose to walk in parks, or playing their favourite sport at the sports centre, or even go to cinemas with friends. Finally, the parents can also believe in the modern healthcare system in cities when any problem happened with their kids.

On the other hand, one of the main drawbacks of living in cities is that there are too dangerous for kids. For example, the minority of people lived in the city are crimes, and they may be a direct effect on the development of a kid if their parents do not take care of them enough. Moreover, traffic is one of the main reason caused accidents, which is another problem that every city has to deal with. However, with a large number of hospitals and experts, this may be very useful in this kind of emergency.

In summary, raising a kid in a city bring many benefits to the diversity development of a kid despite the fact that it may be caused some problem.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ly. Another advantage is that there are many different kinds of outside activities for kids to...
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Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ry city has to deal with. However, with a large number of hospitals and experts, this may be very...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, as to, for example, in addition, in summary, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60248447205 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55217534907 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484472049689 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3991159996 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288976412502 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106276837882 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749319607348 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202635972101 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744402066985 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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