People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society? How can we create an ideal society?
Constructing and living in a perfect society has been one of the most intense wishes of humanity for such a long time. From my point of view, an ideal society requires uncountable perspectives but fulfilling this dream may not be easy
On the one hand, there is a variety of high criteria that a model community needs to achieve. The first requirement is to have an unpolluted environment. Unfortunately, nowadays numerous modern citizens are living under degraded surroundings. The emissions, which discharged from manufactories and households, are contaminating the atmosphere. Furthermore, there appear to be shreds of evidence that people are having excessive consumption of preprocessed foods, which reportedly had inadequate sanitation and detrimental to health. In the second place, an ideal community requires a good security system. Although it is irrefutable that there are always some people wanting to break the laws and commit a crime no matter how strict the legislation system was, a model society should be the place that people can live without being threatened or intimidated. In particular, social catastrophes such as murder, burglary or fraud, to mention but a few should be diminished to the minimum
On the other hand, several actions should be taken to creating this perfect society. First and foremost, there is a necessity for improving the law and order systems with the main points are to preserve human rights and protect the environment. Since the legislation has been the most efficient administrative tool of the government, adjusting it properly is the first step towards a model community. Secondly, modifying education should be the main priority. Since the educational system plays an important role in fostering future generations, an appropriate syllabus may be contributed to constructing an ideal community. This is shown by the exemplary citizens fortified by the moral values are mostly built up by education
To sum up, a dream society is required an unpolluted environment and a good security system. Hence, improving the legislation system and modifying the education may be a good means of achieving this goal
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, in particular, such as, to sum up, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36764705882 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12459132276 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555882352941 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8514457265 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.666666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231487690921 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723678193484 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07051454967 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155756806835 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052461019347 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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