Q11 : Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Recently, the conservation of animals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with contemporary issues of human beings should take precedence over preserving animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not allow animals to go extinct do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that preventing numerous animal species from disappearing plays a vital role in keeping biodiversity. Furthermore, if it were not for making an effort to save animals, the food chain and ecosystem would be broken due to the extinction of a multitude of species of animals, including endangered wildlife, exerting a detrimental influence on human beings who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that in modern society, there are a number of important global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than the protection of animals given that it is not directly related to people's daily life. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming because a myriad of citizens across the globe suffer from it. To be more specific, global warming hinders the masse to have an improved standard of living, which can even give rise to climate change. Another grave issue is global hunger that is directly related to the life of humans. As an illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the world's population died due to poverty. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that conserving animals should not be a priority for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10031347962 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78866159373 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614420062696 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7480772444 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.466666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275430163447 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753536008456 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543811590027 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146963901019 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317540618575 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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